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Reviewed in the United States on March 26, 2020
Before I write my review, there is currently an update for this book, but I didn't see it until I'd already finished reading it and I don't plan to go back and look for what changed. So anything mentioned could or could not have been fixed by said update.
While the first introductory chapter is very confusing at first, the author ties it in at the end of the book and suddenly it all makes sense. I can appreciate that. Actually I rather enjoyed that tie-in to a small degree.
There were a few minor typos but they did not detract from the story. Mostly they were easily ignored. It was relatively well written over-all, as far as story flow and readability.
Now on to what I did NOT care for.
Shifting POVs is a big pet peeve of mine. If it's from chapter to chapter, that's fine. If it's from paragraph to paragraph, and sentence to sentence, I get REALLY annoyed. And this book does that so much. It was almost like reading someone trying to describe a comic book instead of a novel.
There was also a lot of tell, don't show. But not some of the more important details like why the one character was shaking, what the other character was looking for, maybe even some more details about WHY "He" is fighting but never does anything directly. How many missions fail? Was his the ONLY mission to ever fail? Was his result typical or some sort of fluke? And what was with Sarah's shifting personality? That got annoying.
I get that she's 6 but incredibly intelligent, somehow, and if I read the word "tiny" one more time I was ready to throw my kindle out a window, but she doesn't act like a tiny anything and her personality keeps changing from chapter to chapter.
There's actually a lot of holes in this plot and I don't want to bring them all up, but they were also quite annoying.
Not the worst book I've read on kindle, and unlike so many books released these days, this one actually came to an end instead of a desperate cliff hanger, so that was nice, but this book could have used a few more re-writes and a good editor.
At least the author has potential.