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I wanted to like this
Reviewed in the United States on June 19, 2020
I really wanted to like this book. A teenage protagonist, new in town, faced with saving his sister from monsters. I love horror, I love monsters, but I couldn't love this book.
The writing just wasn't good. The author did a lot of telling rather than showing and sometimes he did both. The sentence structure was weird (multiple phrases like "it could be heard" rather than "he heard"), strange metaphors, and adjectives like "very", all the things you learn NOT to do in any creative writing class. In one sentence, he's listening to a barely audible purr, and in the next, he's running toward the roar. Is it a purr or a roar? They're not the same. The dialogue was just bad, and everyone sounded the same, very stilted.
At about 60% I considered giving up, but I was invested and wanted to know what happened, and having finished it I'm still not sure. So, the monsters came from the mine, but why? How? What happened in the mine to create them? Nothing is explained by the end of the story. Maybe a good editor, or anyone reading this before publication, could have helped this.
I'm giving this a generous two-star rating because there is a decent story here. It just wasn't a well-written one.