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Andrews is Capable of Better
Reviewed in the United States 🇺🇸 on September 14, 2017
This is the second book in the series, so there has been an opportunity to improve. It hasn't happened.
There is not sufficient world building and what there is at base, is not novel: here there are Houses, instead of e.g., cabals or covens. The remainder of the world-building is dropped in as the story requires. That means the authors make up the rules as they go along, rather than setting the rules at the outset and writing the story in accordance with those rules. The latter is more difficult, but far more satisfying for the reader.
Character development is pretty much cartoonish. It's all about physical characteristics. I had trouble keeping the hero and the villain of the first volume separated in my mind, they seemed so physically similar--and for some reason everyone with Prime magic is physically gorgeous, whether they have illusion capabilities like Augustine or not. Nothing is subtle. For example, the protagonists' sexual tension is almost instantly so hot and heavy, you could cut it with a knife. If it weren't for the sex scenes, I'd take this for a YA book.
Finally, the grammar is atrocious. Surely as many books as this couple has sold, their publisher could afford to use a human proof reader to get the pronouns, verbs and adverbs correct. Also, the authors met in an English class, or so they say.
I remain an enthusiastic fan of this couple's early work. This series is, for me, a let-down. If the author had lacked a past track record of solid writing, I'd have given this book two stars.