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Fun with 2 dimensional characters, poor grammar
Reviewed in the United States on October 6, 2020
I found the story intriguing and sort of fun to read. That said, some of the characters were 2 dimensional and didn't feel completely fleshed out. I found it hard to believe that all these people/creatures would lay down their lives for this woman because she was nice to them a few times.
The assassin character seems a bit hot headed and immature to be 1000+ years old.
The grammatical errors OMG!!! are quite numerous and really detracts from the story. I mean there are significant things like improper word use like using "must" instead of "muss" or "and" instead of "an". Poor sentence structure like "she was extremely too hungry ". These are NUMEROUS and seem to be on every 3rd or 4th page.
The story is less fun to read when you need context clues to figure out what the author meant to say. An editor or proofreader or that grammarly program would have been beneficial.
The sexy scenes were hot and fun to read.