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The Good, The Bad and The Ugly
Reviewed in the United States on September 4, 2020
I do not know quite where to start, so I will start at the beginning — the disappointing cover. I will admit that I am not particularly a hockey fan, simply because people living in the southern part of the USA, are not exposed to the game on a regular basis, like they are football, basketball or baseball. I did not have a preconceived picture in my head of what a sexy, babe-magnet, 25-year-old hockey star might look like. That being said, the guy on the cover does not in any way look like he would be any of the above — sexy, babe-magnet or 25 years old. He looks more like he might play for a high-school league. I cannot imagine that smooth, baby face and long, blonde, curly hair belonging to the guy described in this book.
The overall story of how Finn fell in love with Vivian was sweet. However, the description of his mother’s treatment of him, when he was a small child, and her sexual encounter with Finn’s 15-year-old friend when he was in high school, fell into the cesspool of sexual and emotional abuse of children — and Mom gets away with it. I think there is enough of that these days without making sexual abuse of children part of a romance novel. What was this author thinking?
Vivian was adorable and a perfect foil for Finn’s darker personality. I could not see the reason for Vivian’s pacemaker situation. The love bug could have suddenly bitten Finn so he realized that he was in love with Vivian without her near death experience because of a worn-out pacemaker. That would not happen in real life as pacemakers are electronically monitored constantly by a cardiologist. My husband has a pacemaker (his second one), which sends a report to his cardiologist every night via blue tooth.
About halfway through the book, grammar and punctuation errors exploded. There were incomplete and run-on sentences, commas misplaced or left out, as well as awkward sentences and sentences which made no sense. Then there were the contractions. I cannot think of one time in the entire book where a verb was not used as a contraction. That is fine in dialogue, if that is the way the person would normally talk, but the descriptive parts of the book should not have contractions.
A good proof reader and content editor would help tremendously. For example: One time Finn and Vivian went to her apartment, but a few paragraphs later, they were suddenly in his apartment, then they were magically back in hers.
I have a feeling that so many authors of contemporary romance novels just churn them out, not bothering to read their own work. Or, maybe they do and either do not care or do not know any better. I do not understand, in this day of electronic grammar checkers, why an author would have so little pride in her work that she would publish a book full of grammatical, syntax and context errors. I learned those grammar rules in 9th grade English — maybe this author missed that class. It is rude for authors to expect readers to spend money buying and time reading their books when those books contain one error after another. I think Johanna Lindsey and Barbara Cartland must be turning over in their respective graves.
I received a free ARC of this book from Hidden Gems. The review is voluntary. The opinions are my own.
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